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02 February 2012 @ 05:19 pm
Fic: Moving In (Revision 2)  
Title: Moving In
Word Count: 124
Rating: T
Original/Fandom: Original
Pairings (if any): Synara/Nate
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/RPF etc): none
Summary: This occurs prior to my previously posted original fic: Returns.  Synara gets her first apartment. 
Notes: This is for Challenge #13c on [info]writerverse whereby we have to trim our first revision down to 100 - 125 words.  The original Moving In was 342 words, the first revision was 242. This revision was much more difficult and I'm still not sure that I managed to retain the emotional undertone I was going for...

Moving In (revision 2)

Synara was overcome in the new apartment; the light was all wrong and there was no color.

She heard the door close and Nate approach. She deftly stepped behind the leather couch, suddenly interested in the walls.  His increasingly bold advances disconcerted her despite returning his attraction.  She wanted something to happen...

Just... not yet. She idly fingered her necklace. This life was still too uncomfortable. But could she find comfort in this impersonal space?

“Thank you for finding this place, Nate.”

“No more dirt or crowds for you.”

She silenced the retort that she would miss being surrounded by people and nature.  This was the price she had to pay to leave that life.  She smiled grimly.  She would learn to love this.
 
 
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