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22 March 2012 @ 12:21 pm
Ficlet: Cleansing Rain [Firefly]  
Title: Cleansing Rain
Prompt: caught in the rain
Word Count: 177
Rating: T
Original/Fandom: Firefly
Pairings (if any): none
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/RPF etc): none
Summary: A rainstorm near the Companion Training House
Notes: written for weekly challenge at writerverse
Set between the series and the movie

Inara stood alone in the middle of the field, as the grey skies above her opened up. The first raindrops fell fat and cold on her face and shoulders, running down her arms, leaving goosebumps in their wake. As they fell faster and harder, she could feel the silk of her dress growing heavy, clinging to her skin.

Her cold fingers worked through the wet laces and she peeled the dress away, letting it fall in a scarlet puddle at her feet. She tilted her face up, holding her arms wide to embrace the rain. She welcomed the numbing chill spreading across her cheeks, chasing away hidden tears that she would not admit, even to herself.

As abruptly as it began, the storm subsided, and she opened her eyes to see muted sunlight already fighting through the remains of the clouds, sparkling on the freshly washed grass and flowers in the meadow. She pulled her cloak around her and gathered her gown in her arms as she turned to begin the walk back to the training house.

I'm enjoying: Angel
Lisa: writerverse team prosemeridian_rose on March 22nd, 2012 10:37 pm (UTC)
This is amazing. Such rich descriptions from the cold, fat, raindrops to the scarlet puddle of her dress.

Also in character, weeping alone in the rain, and her quiet dignity as she simply slips her cloak over her naked body to walk back to the house.

I cannot find a single thing to give concrit about. Wonderful piece.
magickmoonsmagickmoons on March 23rd, 2012 12:47 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I was really nervous about this one. It feels different to me than my usual style.
Ami Ven: Team Proseami_ven on March 31st, 2012 06:36 am (UTC)
Very nice! Your descriptions are absolutely beautiful.
magickmoons: butterflymagickmoons on April 1st, 2012 03:58 am (UTC)