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24 March 2012 @ 01:10 pm
Ficlet: Presentation  
Title: Presentation
Word Count: 213
Rating: K
Original/Fandom: Stargate
Characters: Daniel Jackson
Notes: missing scene from the movie
Summary: His life is going to change...


He paces restlessly in the nicely appointed lobby outside the hotel’s conference room. The prickly humming along his skin and inside his muscles makes him think that that maybe he should have skipped that third cup of coffee this morning. Too late now, he thinks as he increases the tempo of his pacing, trying to burn through the caffeine jitters.

He’s going to need the underlying adrenaline rush, though, to get through the next couple of hours. He’s never particularly cared about gaining the acceptance of his peers. Which is a good thing, since he is probably about to throw it all away, he muses as he grasps his handwritten notes tightly.

He stops short in front of a vending machine and fishes some coins out of his pocket. Maybe some food will help. He decides on the little orange crackers with peanut butter; they were never fresh to begin with so he doesn’t have to worry if they have passed their Expire By date. The first bite crumbles to dust in his mouth and he wishes that he had more coffee.

He drops the packet into the nearest trash can and is just starting to re-arrange his notes for the fourth time, when the door opens.

“Dr. Jackson, they’re ready for you.”

dreximgirl: Cute puppydreximgirl on March 24th, 2012 06:45 pm (UTC)
I like this, it shows his nervousness yet determination and belief in what he is about to say. Your descriptions of the setting as well as Daniel’s feelings are very good.
Only critique I have is maybe instead of ‘expire by date’ you could say ‘expiry date’ or even ‘expiration date’ but it’s not a major thing and is enjoyable without a change.

magickmoonsmagickmoons on March 25th, 2012 02:49 am (UTC)
Thanks :) I hear you about the expire by phrasing; it's probably just a personal quirk of mine. I hate 'expiry date' for some reason, but I might change it to expiration date. Thanks again for the feedback!
nymaeria: space samnymaeria on March 25th, 2012 01:42 am (UTC)
i love it! you really capture his anxiety. and what a great interpretation of your three random words!
magickmoons: sarcastic jackmagickmoons on March 25th, 2012 02:51 am (UTC)
Thank you :) I was ruminating on the words, not even thinking SG-1, and it just kind of built itself!
Fig Newton: daniel archeologysg_fignewton on March 25th, 2012 06:30 am (UTC)
A nice look at the very beginning. :)
magickmoons: classic teammagickmoons on March 25th, 2012 02:16 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
turnerwolfturnerwolf on April 1st, 2012 03:33 am (UTC)
Great little drabble. You have captured Jackson's nervousness perfectly.

The only suggestion I have would be that the capitalizaion of 'Expire By' is not necessary.

Great job :)
magickmoons: danielmagickmoons on April 1st, 2012 04:09 am (UTC)